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Ironically I like the way the first panel came out, especially the lighting, those fish, and Zenith. Second panel could have used more work, but it will do.

I STILL CAN'T BELIEVE I HAVE A PLOT THANK YOU OKURA. :heart:

EDIT: Thanks to =Kroc for some INTERESTING SUGGESTIONS
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!Kroc Dec 8, 2009
Hmm. Perfect composure in frame A. Frame B has _always_ troubled me.

What if, frame B was two frames (or boxout) instead? For "Isn’t that them over there"—show a long distance shot from Zenith’s viewpoint; Like he has caught sight of them and we can see their relative location in the expanse we are interested in from frame A.

For the last frame, show the close up with Li’s comment. You could focus more on the expressions then as the previous new frame would have cared about the surrounding environment.

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~Kameira Dec 8, 2009
That's a great idea. If I keep this scene I will definitely employ it. :D Cheers!

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~Ryengu Nov 16, 2007
The art's Perfect. What I would love is links between the pages.

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~Kameira Nov 16, 2007
THANK YOU. I AM LAZY ;3;

I will update my journal with all the Zen pages on it. Eventually.

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*RyokoNoKalo Sep 23, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
Are those hourglass dolphins I see mingling in there? I must say, this comic has piqued my interest! Your splendid handling of dolphin anatomy while successfully conveying subtle emotions and such is really nice.
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~Kameira Sep 23, 2007
They're not hourglasses, just really funky looking bottlenoses.

And thank you much ;3; I'm so glad you like my comic so far.

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*RyokoNoKalo Sep 25, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
It's all good! ^_^
Thanks very much for watching me! :heart:
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!Kroc May 16, 2007
This is <3
The first panel is marvelous in just so many ways. Overal subtelty, the wonderful accuracy of the fish mozying along. I think the speech bubble outline blends too much with the background - I don't know if it would look right, but maybe a minor drop shadow around the bubble? 5px@25% or something like that.

I really think you should spend some more time on the bottom panel to match the colours above ^^; The dolphins could do with tinting to stress depth

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~Kameira May 16, 2007
It's only any good because you made me make it good. :XD:

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!Kroc May 17, 2007
You put the image there for me to comment on =P
Work harder, slave! ;)

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