*Kameira

i do believe i am on the verge of killing my god damn self

it is 6:19 in the morning where i am and i htink my eyes are going to pop out of my sovkets and roll away

i went to bed at 11:50 last night

11:50

this is not 1 am or 2 am. this is a reasonable hour considering it's summer vacation

i slept for half an hour

half

an hour

oh my god

i feel like crushing the skull of an innocent gnome with my bare fist

HOLY SHIT HOLY CRAP

OMG

OMG WHAT

IT'S ABOUT THREE WEEKS until the glorious =Link3Kokiri gets his ASS on a PLANE and sails FROM IRELAND towards the vast great white retarded north of CANADA, specifically where I LIVE.

CAPITALIZING random words is FUN.

I'd like to note that HE is the one who is FLYING. Over the OCEAN. Through the AIR. In a metal tube with WINGS and REALLY CHEAP FOOD. For over HALF A DAY. I'm just sitting here the entire duration of this while showering multiple times and I'm the one shitting bricks. HE'S NOT EVEN BREAKING A SWEAT

And then when he gets here he will be living IN MY FILTHY HOUSE. Drinking from MY CUPS. And sleeping IN MY BED (I am, of course, moving to upper bunk). And we will watch movies and play gaymes and eat truckloads of steaks.

And my parents, who live in the SAME HOUSE, are OKAY WITH THIS. In fact my mum is ALSO SHITTING BRICKS IN DELIGHT because she can't wait to see Lee's sweet little Irish face.

FUCK.

UUUUGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

MY TOE

MY TOE

MY TOE IS FALLING OFF

MY TOE

MY TOE

I AM THE MASTAR GANGSTAR

I don't breathe fire.

Not even green fire.

After the second chapter is over (which it will be soonish), I may be going back occasionally and redoing some of the pages from chapter one and earlier chapter two, including the art and the dialogue. I'm not happy with the way I've expressed some of the characters in both expression and dialogue - many of them lack the vibrant personalities I always wanted to give them. I've had people mistake Li for Zenith, or Kael for Li, Valens for Vethes, Aviel for Sear, etc. and I fear this is because I never differentiated between them quite enough.

I want people to see Li as the outgoing and spirited, but kind and gentle girl I always saw her as. Kray should appear to be Vethes' whinging, brown-nosing, spineless lackey in the reader's eyes, sporting what has been a long history of rivalry with Zenith, instead of merely an antagonistic object. I want people to know which of the dolphins is Kael, the wise and noble, but occasionally brash elder of the pod, Li's older brother. Vethes should appear to be less of the typical plotting no-good villain, and more of a shallow and greedy, but all-around mysterious, draconian powermonger. And Zenith should be the preposterous little coward which being bottom rung in his pod has made him.

For example, the short romantic scene between Li and Zenith on page 20 doesn't quite appear to be so romantic as it does Li jumping on Zen the moment it becomes dawn. It doesn't quite express the way Li and Zenith have been in the past, the hardships they faced together, how close they were to each other and her reasons for coming on to Zenny like that.

Not only that, but some of the anatomy is just bad.

If you guys have any more critique like that you would like to supply me with, by all means, please do so. I need as much help as I can get.

So, yeah! I'll get around to that soon. Right now I'm dying of thirst and fatigue. So, I'll catch you all later!

NIGHT